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Day 3

Today we would like you to edit your story.

 

Can you improve a word choice? If I had used the word 'cross' to describe a character, could I improve my story by using 'hot-tempered' or 'irritable'?

 

Have you punctuated correctly? Have you had a go at using direct speech?

        “I’m missing you all so much,” cried Miss Doran.

        Miss Doran cried, “I’m missing you all so much.”

        Miss Doran stomped her foot and cried, “I’m missing you all so much.”

 

Have you used one conjunction per sentence? Can you attempt to use the conjunction 'while' or 'when'?

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